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-Hands down, simply the best description of The Experience I've come across.

Throughout your writing I could truly relate to my experiences.

My first words out of hyperspace were -"they uncovered my layers" very similar to:

"On the inside,
shedding skin,
infinite layers to this onion,
But the peeling still began."​

And this is a very powerfully profound insight also:
"An Eye shut,
Can not see.
An Open mind,
Can always be."
​

That's a very fine piece of literature you've created!
I can never find the words to describe my trips; hence my signature.

But you've captured ALL its' untold glory!
 
I dont know if I captured allll of it haha. But I tried to bring something back to share for sure ;)

I'm glad you really liked it, I love to share what I write for that reason.

here's my personal favorite line:

"Here,
I am inside of you,
There,
you are inside of me."

Because physically the spice is inside you, but spiritually you are inside of it. :D But this also has other deeper meanings as well :D
 
It is a wonderful composition;
and each independent part adds to the whole collectively.
Every phrase has meaning as well as the paragraphs and finally into the entire poem its-self.

For me it really rang true, and for that I've been inspired,
for I haven't traveled lately or often for that matter.

It's every 3 months or so that I get the call from spice to return and I think I hear my hyperspace phone ringing
 
mydriasis said:
Here's a poem about my first breakthrough experience with spice. I have posted this on other boards, so no this isn't plagerized(s.p.).

Devout Meaning of Travel

Sun shine, star light,
Open the gate tonight,
A Breathe for fear,
and a breathe for hope.
A dream to steer,
and a dream to cope.

A panorama,
raw energy,
A paradox,
origin of nothingness.

but it's Three, Two,
1,
Blast off.

Pieces of tin and copper,
tearing me apart.
Refracting the seascape,
this is where it starts.

The bay of paradise,
in the beggers harbor.
A meaning so concise,
it could only bring demise.

And when I die,
so does my time.
But here I am,
to traverse the possibilities.

Possibilities of an infinite infinity,
Possibilities of this divine catastrophe.

But here I am to dwell,
to dwell on my possibilities.
The onyx eclipses swell,
with all of the amenities.

On the inside,
shedding skin,
infinite layers to this onion,
But the peeling still began.

An Eye shut,
Can not see.
An Open mind,
Can always be.

Destroying the halls of hollow,
through an act of,
mesmerizing geometry,
words I can not follow.
Slices in ornate marble,

Onyx water,
Milky Sky,
both liquid,
both can fly.
magnified,
through a prism of light.

Magnified,
with all of her might.

Magnified,
by the demiurges parable.

Here,
I am inside of you,
There,
you are inside of me.

White,
free to be,
Black,
I am back.

I am back.
My darling.
Where are you?
A watch with one arm,
can not be two.
Where are you?


Hope you all enjoyed reading as much as I did writing!
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Beautiful.
 
tha just beautifull myraisis!!
it sometimes makes me quite poetic as well, I'll have to actualluy write some of it down next time I get inspired in a similar way
thanx for sharing
 
Thanks for reading and enjoying!

Elofer I'd love to read some poetry!!! Not a lot of people write these days, I think it's a total shame. If I didn't write I'd have so much ______(lack of better words) bottled up inside of me. I need to get it out there to heal myself.
 
thank you for you mydraisis!! thats wonderfull! I will share when I write something I feel should be shared, working on a future book ..not enough...I want to publish it...mabey as a chilrens book..I dunno..its going slowly:p yyyaaaaaaayyyyyy!
 
One conveys so much more when it's done with love.

Thanks for sharing mydriasis. Very inspiring.

I think we should have a thread for poetically written trip reports.
 
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