You are reminding me of the Eagles Gift, by Carlos Castaneda. Ever read it?

To me, this also reads like some modern gnostic writings, minus the archons. Minus the general paranoia that I get from that stuff. Or perhaps the archons here become part of the machine and not to be feared?

IDK, maybe the Castandeda/gnostic comparisons won't seem at all apt to you--but I still think you are communicating your ideas better than you're giving yourself credit for. Keep trying though--I'd very much like to read more. Lay it on us.