PSYCHEDELIC UTOPIA - bookpreview...

[Psyzauber]

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I made a beta version 0.25 from my book Psychedelic Utopia online as PDF.

https://docs.google.com/viewer?a=v&pid=sites&srcid=ZGVmYXVsdGRvbWFpbnxmaWxlc2Jvb2tzbXVzaWN8Z3g6MzNjOGMzOTUzZmJjZjVl

in this state the text is 50% incomplete and quite unreviewed yet
every feedback is very welcome!!

I added a copy & paste version of DMT Nexus Hyperspace Lexicon as
chapter 3 from the book, also to feed curiosity

As long as I do not get confirmation from The Traveler about
his good will I will not make any changes/extensions...

thanks to everyone giving feedback...
love and light
ibogalien

 

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The natural dmt producing pineglad is the central processing unit of consciousness and a chemical activation causes many changes in our brain hegemony.

Although poetic, I just can't even

 

[Psyzauber]

may this statement be a poetical naive missassumption or wrong english use ( not my mother language..) anyway please let me better understand your point

 

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I don't know where to start. It might be a good idea to write with your native language then have it translated later. The above quote is inaccurate and the rest of it needs tons of editing for starters. If you read the FAQ there is a bit that covers how the PINEAL gland dmt theory has yet to be proven. Also, what chemical activation? What changes?
If you are going to try to post facts like this then back it up and elaborate. Otherwise just stick to your story. The rest of the chapters are full of subjective metaphysical musings written to sound like they are objective facts. At least that's how I perceived it and for this reason I find it difficult to read.

Also why quote the nexus wiki when you can write something personal and unique?

The mental dent advertisement and your news report is pretty funny though :lol:

 

[112233]

needs tons of editing for starters.
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and for this reason I find it difficult to read.
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Also why quote the nexus wiki when you can write something personal and unique?

 

[Psyzauber]

The signal is yet a story not yet scientific enough to be more fact and pineal glands dmt theory is also an experience story, which should not be presented scientifically, true enough...

what chemical activation? ibogaine does so, by experienced story
which changes? an extra activated pineal gland may receive and decode more cosmic consciousness then before extra activation

"If you are going to try to post facts like this then back it up and elaborate."
"The rest of this chapter is full of subjective metaphysical musings written to sound like they are objective facts"

I see you point of using language which seems to present facts, I will update
the text to be receivable relativistic enough to be able to be wrong.


the quote from the nexus is temporal until I get an okay from the traveler and disappears or gets extended/adjusted depending on the wind.

thank you!!!
please remember that this is a beta and until release the text
will upgrade and develope due to feedback

 

[Psyzauber]

"tons of editing for starters...
difficult to read..."

yes I get more conscious about that,
imagine that the pdf is a quite unreviewed copy from
a handwriten text and there was yet
no time to make it elegant and correct...

note around 02:15 o clock...
I was updating the text according to this feedback
and made the beginning a little bit more easy to read.

 

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I think overall if you moved away from the "this is how it is" tone to more of a "this is how it is for me" tone it would be better formatted. Some of your trip reports already take on this poetic narrative for example. It's creative writing but there is so much new age terminology that it comes off as preachy and incoherent at times.

Your introduction story could be elaborated upon by a lot. Give the project time and don't be afraid to delete some stuff and keep going.

The lexicon comes out of nowhere and isn't cited or referenced why it's there in the first place. I really don't see the point of it being there. It would make more sense if you were quoting specific parts of it for an essay or something rather than just dumping the whole lot of other peoples work.

 

[Psyzauber]

yeah definetely I agree with all what you said..

of course if I get an okay for the lexicon I will
make it clear that the information came from the nexus
and also will delete quite some parts that are not fitting
and add some of the preachy new age terminology.

therefore in the end the lexicon would look very different
to this simple copy and paste version.

the idea for it was to spread curiosity by letting the 98%
of people that read the book and never heard about a
hyperspace lexicon know about such thing. And to use it
as some kind of explainatory lexicon for the language
used in the other text.

I have no hurry at all the project is non commercial and
the tone "this is how it is for me" sounds much better yeah...

thank you!!